Would you turn Jim's first page? Be tough. Share insights with a comment.

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  • John V - 15 years ago

    I voted yes, because farts are always funny. Same with some other guy getting hit in the crotch. Always good for a laugh. In fact, if that could be worked into this first page, it would be even better. "TJ kicked Private Skidmarks in the balls. The private emitted a great and sour fart (challenge: mname the book that phrase came from) as he doubled over in pain." Now that's what I call comedy.

    Seriously, I think this submission is a put-on.

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