I liked the first paragraph. The rest was backstory. No turn.
The first component, a fear that so many were feeling was the nearly daily revelations from Joe McCarthy that Communists were secretly infiltrating the whole country and soon would be taking away the freedoms saved by the world war that ended ten years before.
Does Terry read his prose aloud? I'd guess not. If he did, he might be able to re-write it so that it flows smoothly. At the moment it's terribly jerky and uninviting.