Whilst I really like the premise of a wizard about to be banished, there are a few things here that would stop me reading on. First is the random capitalisation of words like 'magical' and 'wizards'. Second is the choice of names. Both of these - for me - give this writing an amateurish feel. But these are definitely fixable!
Some random comments:
"Blight was to be banished. is stronger than "Because Blight was to be banished."
Names are important. "Huckabee" reminds me of a certain politician, taking me out of the story for a moment. "Blight" makes me wonder if this is an allegorical tale.
Whilst I really like the premise of a wizard about to be banished, there are a few things here that would stop me reading on. First is the random capitalisation of words like 'magical' and 'wizards'. Second is the choice of names. Both of these - for me - give this writing an amateurish feel. But these are definitely fixable!
Almost but not quite, for me.
Some random comments:
"Blight was to be banished. is stronger than "Because Blight was to be banished."
Names are important. "Huckabee" reminds me of a certain politician, taking me out of the story for a moment. "Blight" makes me wonder if this is an allegorical tale.