Would you turn Greg's first page? Be tough. Comments help the writer.

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  • Linda - 13 years ago

    Starting with dialogue is fine, but there's no sparkle to the writing. The scene setting is bland (she shakes her head and sighs; he chuckles -- very boring, adds nothing to the characterization). I don't know who these people are and the author has given me no reason to care about them. Sorry!

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