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Would you turn Cathy's first page? Be tough. Comments help the writer.

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  • Perry - 13 years ago

    I found myself questioning the wrong things. It does suggest a nice little conflict of social expectations but I wondered if the female character was a child when she didn't know what 'mesmerize' meant. But then I realized she was probably an older girl.

    I think this needs bit more setting than it has.

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