Would you turn this prologue's first page? Be tough. Comments help the writer.

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  • j.f. Lane - 14 years ago

    The opening didn't leave me with any questions or any reason to continue. It's cute, but it isn't intriguing. Also, when you say that the storyteller has no distinct age, and then say that he is different from "other people his age," it's a little jarring.

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