Too bad. The prologue was better than the first chapter.
I found it a bit jarring to read and there were some writing issues that jumped out.
For example:
When describing the laugh, I would have preferred something less vague.
not
"Seth Archer laughed, not a happy one, a nervous one"
but
"Seth archer laughed, not his usual warm chuckle, but a thin almost hiccup of a laugh."
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Too bad. The prologue was better than the first chapter.
I found it a bit jarring to read and there were some writing issues that jumped out.
For example:
When describing the laugh, I would have preferred something less vague.
not
"Seth Archer laughed, not a happy one, a nervous one"
but
"Seth archer laughed, not his usual warm chuckle, but a thin almost hiccup of a laugh."