Finding Magic's enticement elements

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  • Eilidh - 11 years ago

    Hi Ray,
    You sent me this story to beta read and I loved it. In the first chapter you have a typo, "just desserts," should be just deserts--that which one deserves--so the waiter metaphor doesn't work.
    Excellent story!

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