Would you turn Alex's first page?
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  • John Phoenix - 9 years ago

    I was drawn in by the first line and I like the writing but I wish it had contained a bit more tension. We know that her ticket to freedom is at the bar but what are the stakes? And why should I care whether or not she gets wherever it is she needs to be free from? Good luck and thank you for sharing.

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