The original and edited version are much more rooted in the present. The published version sinks into backstory more than I would like on a first page, and I think that hurts the forward momentum that would keep me turning pages.
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The original and edited version are much more rooted in the present. The published version sinks into backstory more than I would like on a first page, and I think that hurts the forward momentum that would keep me turning pages.