Would you turn M.Z.'s first page? Be tough. Comments help the writer.

Posted 9 years.

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  • John V - 9 years ago

    No turn. How many times have we read pretty much the same description of a crowded marketplace? This is well written, but I'm tired of seeing this as an opening. I already have a picture of a crowded marketplace in my mind. All you have to do is mention it and get on with the action. You can add more description in passing if you like.

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