Hi Ray, You sent me this story to beta read and I loved it. In the first chapter you have a typo, "just desserts," should be just deserts--that which one deserves--so the waiter metaphor doesn't work. Excellent story! Cheers, Eilidh
0/4000 chars
Hi Ray,
You sent me this story to beta read and I loved it. In the first chapter you have a typo, "just desserts," should be just deserts--that which one deserves--so the waiter metaphor doesn't work.
Excellent story!
Cheers,
Eilidh